Lyric poetry is one of the most common forms of poetry we see in today's world. Many of the songs we listen to on a daily basis are good examples of lyric poetry, as they express the thoughts and feelings of a single speaker and are often emotionally charged. One popular type of lyric poetry is the haiku. Written in formal verse, the haiku follows a fixed pattern of three lines in the 5-7-5 format. The first line contains 5 syllables, the second line contains 7 syllables, and the third line goes back to 5 syllables. Haikus are often reflective and contain messages about nature or human experience. We are going to write our own haikus-- but with a modern twist! Introducing the twaiku! This poetic form combines the syllabic pattern of the traditional haiku style with the 140 character limit on Twitter. Think of something you saw or experienced that impacted you in some way. Did you see something beautiful in nature? Did you witness an extraordinary act of kindness? Did your best friend move away? Did you adopt a pet? Lose one? Turn that experience into a twaiku. Remember, you can clap out the syllables to a word to make sure it fits the pattern.
REQUIREMENTS:
1) Follow the 5-7-5 pattern of a traditional haiku
2) Use 140 characters or less
3) Your poem must be reflective on either nature or an emotional experience
Below are my examples:
swaying like a swing
ReplyDeletemoving as the wind comes up
the grass is moving
I like your simile in the first line! Nice job, Lily, beautiful imagery.
DeleteGermany I played
ReplyDeleteMoving from my home was hard
new one i have found
Moving is always difficult, even if you don't move but home moves away from you-- My parents no longer live here. Great job Gavin.
DeleteMy name is Aubree
ReplyDeleteI like to eat scrambled eggs.
I have a dog, Max
You've got the syllable count down perfect, nice job there Aubree. Remember though, lyric poetry, and haikus in particular, should be reflective and emotional-- Think nature or personal experience!
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DeleteREDO Aubree Ellis 3rd hour
Raining on Friday
Forced to be inside all day
watch raindrops instead
The birds are chirping
ReplyDeleteThey dance and sing wildly
Then they all drop dead
Nice personification! Be careful, "wildly" might seem like three syllables at first but check how many "wild" has and then add one for "ly" - I counted 6 for that line. Super harsh ending! Very macabre, I like it. Nice job
DeleteSmell of salt water
ReplyDeletewhite sand hot under my feet
a gleaming,pink shell
This is excellent Alex! I can almost see the beach you're describing-- sounds lovely.
DeleteMy name is Aubree
ReplyDeleteI just got a new saddle
For my horse Bucky
The syllable count in this is perfect, great job there. Remember, lyric poetry should emotional or reflective.
DeleteFlowers are pretty
DeletePink,Blue,Purple,Orange,red
Sun shines on flowers
you used and abused
ReplyDeleteforever doesn't last long
and now were apart
This is very well done Margo, you hit the nail on the head with the purpose of lyric poetry. If this is based off your personal experience, I can say I've been right there with you and feel your pain. Beautiful poem.
DeleteA looming shadow
ReplyDeleteSlinking into the darkness
I can’t see the light
(I understand that this doesn't explain what I was feeling or what was going on too well, sorry about that. Let me explain, this is supposed to be about the death of a loved one and how badly it affected me emotionally afterwards. The 'I can't see the light' was supposed to express me being sad. I tried.)
No explanation needed! That's the beauty of poetry-- it says what we often can't. I didn't even need to read your explanation to know this was reflecting on a dark time in your life, whatever that may be. I love your word choice with "slinking"-- connotation there is perfect. Nice job Sylvia
DeleteFalling from the tree,
ReplyDeleteRed leaves falling to the ground,
Brisk air fall is here
My favorite time of year! Nice job, Khenzi
Deletehttps://docs.google.com/a/mybedford.us/document/d/1EpBy0CfZWcoPva2zFRKM-Y4G1F9L_s95dQKo0iK3xkA/edit?usp=sharing
ReplyDeleteLaRiah, can you type out the actual poem as a comment? Links haven't been opening for me recently. Thank you!
DeleteFood is Wonderful
ReplyDeletefinding it in cool places
I eat it a lot
Cold wind in the air
DeleteLeaves are falling everywhere
I adore Autumn
Do I even want to know these "cool places" you're randomly finding food...? Syllable count is perfect, but remember lyric poems should be reflective/emotional. Think nature or personal experience
DeleteNEW POEM
DeleteBY JADEN TURNER
Cold harsh winds in air
Snowflakes are flying about
I freezing to death
Sweatshirt is a song
ReplyDeleteBy Jacob Sartorius
I can't live without
And now I'm curious as to what makes this song so good.. great job here.
DeleteUnder the surface
ReplyDeleteThe sea turtles swim freely
Currents carry them
I love sea turtles and the beach:) Great job!
DeleteI really like food
ReplyDeleteramen noodles are the best
eat food every day
Ramen noodles are about as gourmet as I get. Nice job with your syllable count, but remember lyric poems should be reflective and emotional-- Think nature or experience!
DeleteIt comes over me
DeleteThe stress is attacking me
Please help let me out
Basketball is fun
ReplyDeleteIt is my favorite sport
I love it so much
Your syllable count is perfect, nice job! Remember lyric poems should be emotional. What about basketball makes you love it so much?
DeleteBasketball is great
DeleteI love the intensity
It is tough but fun
Running in the woods
ReplyDeleteBreathing in the cold rough air
Is this gonna end
I love the last line-- exactly how I feel anytime I run. Which is never. Good job Molly.
DeleteSome things can be weird
ReplyDeleteThey can be very random
Refridgerator
Refrigerator
DeleteJust like this twaiku... Lyric poems should be reflective and/or emotional-- make it personal somehow.
DeleteI went on a hike
ReplyDeletedad saw a bear far away
It was cool to see
Better to see one far away than to see one digging in the dumpster outside of your work. Good job.
DeleteRunning at full force
ReplyDeleteThe wind blowing at your face
Running for Bedford
This is good, your syllable count is perfect and you made it personal. But how does running make you feel? Do you like it? Hate it? Personally, I can't stand it. My last line might be something like, "It's modern torture." Just food for thought!
DeleteWind blows through the trees
ReplyDeleteAnd the leaves are falling down
Fall is arriving
My favorite time of year! And apparently a lot of other people's too! Nice job, Alexis.
DeleteYou need a good pass
ReplyDeleteto the setter for a set
so you can hit it
Your form and syllable count is perfect. I'm assuming this is about volleyball? What about how it makes you feel? Do you love it? Let me see that-- Remember, lyric poems should be reflective and/or emotional.
Deletehttps://docs.google.com/a/mybedford.us/document/d/1PR-2jcY2EVUr_PG5CbEIEK-fYiAikpIJsn7JBBkbx38/edit?usp=sharing
ReplyDeleteCan you type this out as an actual comment? Links aren't working-- Thanks!
DeleteCold air is coming
DeleteLeaves falling down in the breeze
Fall has arrived
Looking at the dogs,
ReplyDeleteWas loneliness in their eyes,
two dogs were now ours.
That second line though!! "Was loneliness in their eyes" Powerful stuff, Natalie. I remember what it was like taking both my pups home from the pound. Nice job!
DeleteThe full moon above
ReplyDeleteBrings huge waves to the ocean
And joy to the Sea
I really like your use of personification in the last line. Well done.
DeleteBack and forth swaying
ReplyDeleteTrees rock in the gentle breeze
They just keep swaying
Nice job TJ-- You paint a beautiful picture here. Can you think of another word for "swaying" in the last line that provides the same image but isn't a repetition? Just food for thought!
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ReplyDeleteCity streets booming
ReplyDeleteTall skyscrapers are looming
People are zooming
I really like your external rhyme in this and your word choice-- makes it feel very fast paced, much like a city! Good job.
DeleteDance is a language
ReplyDeleteIt says much more than words can
But it is silent
This is beautifully written!! You dance, I take it? I used to dance myself, lyric to be exact. Lyric dance and lyric poetry are both very similar-- lots of emotion! They both also tell a story without really telling a story. Great work.
DeleteMy mind is confused
ReplyDeleteIt is very flammable
Do not ignite it
You make excellent use of metaphor in your poem-- Very reflective! Great job.
DeleteTrees are turning red
ReplyDeleteUgg boots are back in season
Fall makes me happy
😊🍂🍁
Fall makes me happy too! :) Good job with your poem Caroline.
DeleteDrumming silently
ReplyDeleteagainst the sleepy wood roof
a sweet lullaby.
Wow! You didn't even have to say rain and I knew you were talking about rain-- That's what we call imagery! Wonderful use of both personification and metaphor-- Really sets the tone. Excellent.
DeleteHappy turtles swimming
ReplyDeleteI say Hi to a turtle
He flaps his hand back
So cute! I love turtles! Be careful though, haikus follow a 5-7-5 syllabic pattern-- I counted 6 in your first line. Is there another descriptive word you could use instead of happy that's only one syllable?
DeleteHappy turtles swim
DeleteI say Hi to a turtle
He flaps his hand back
Red, green, yellow leaves
ReplyDeleteSwaying in the chilly breeze
Fall has come to stay
Nice descriptive language! I like your use of the word "swaying" in the second line. Good job!
DeleteYoutube is my life
ReplyDeleteJacksepticeye, Markiplier
I love all of them
Your first and third lines are spot on with syllables, but I'm not sure about the second line. I counted 8? Also remember that lyric poems should be reflective and personal! YouTube channels are a fine subject if you feel strongly about them, but what about those two in particular make you love them so much? Do they connect to you on some level? Do they make you laugh, adding joy to your life? Let me feel what you feel!
DeleteLight will always come
ReplyDeleteDon't give in to the darkness
Just turn on the light
Very true! Nice metaphor Kate, you did a great job.
DeleteThey said don't go their
ReplyDeleteI didn't listen to them
I made a mistake
You've got me curious-- Go in where? Why was it a mistake? Be careful with your spelling-- "Their" is used in reference to another person whereas "there" is used for place.
DeleteI ran through the field,
ReplyDeleteRain kissing my face and hands,
Refreshing the leaves.
Lovely! Very nice personification in the second line-- It gives a pleasant tone to the poem, letting your reader know that you don't mind the rain. I, for one, love it and love being in it. Good job, Lucy!
DeleteI hate salami
ReplyDeleteSalami is so stanky
You tear me apart
Your syllable count is perfect here, but remember that lyric poems should be emotional and personal somehow. I hate salami too, but it isn't meaningful enough of an emotion for me to write a poem about it.
DeleteThe moon shines so bright
ReplyDeleteThe children give me a fright
Its Halloween night
Nice external rhyme! Seasonally appropriate, too. Good job.
DeleteAutumn is with us
ReplyDeleteI see leaves fall to the ground
And taste the donuts
Apple cider cinnamon donuts are my fav! Nice job Morgan.
DeleteCheese pizza great
ReplyDeleteI cannot live without it
Yeah, it is great mate
Cheese pizza is great***
DeleteI cannot live without it
Yeah, it is great mate
You've got the syllable count down perfect Farah, but remember lyric poems should be reflective and emotional. They should connect to you personally on a deeper level than a slice of cheese za.
DeleteFall is in the air
ReplyDeleteTrees are turning fall colors
City lights glow bright
I love that last line-- Gives a kind of magical feel to the poem. You did a great job, Kara. Is there another word you can think of other than "fall" to describe the colors? Bright? Many? Just food for thought!
DeleteOn a silent pond...
ReplyDeleteA frog jumps into the pond,
Splash! Some more silence
I love this! Nice onomatopoeia in the last line-- It interrupts the scene briefly before things become tranquil again. Great job.
DeleteThe water flying
ReplyDeleteThe fishes swimming to sea
All under the sight
Under the sight of what? You're spot on with your syllable count and your reflection of nature. Nice job.
DeleteStunning and dazzling,
ReplyDeleteSensational, resplendent,
Bright and engrossing
(It's about the sun)
No need to explain Braden! The beauty of poetry is that it explains through imagery for you-- Also it can be left up to interpretation. Maybe someone else will read it and think of snow! Excellent vocabulary-- "resplendent" is a 75 cent word for sure. Great job!
DeleteSparkling like glass
ReplyDeleteIt's waters glitter and shine
The lake-time has come
Excellent imagery and use of simile in your first line! Your word choice with "glitter" and "shine" really set the tone here-- Obviously the lake is a place you love. Be careful when counting syllables though-- "sparkling" only has two, which leaves you one short for that line. Try adding a descriptive word to that line right before glass to balance the syllabic pattern back out. Bright? Clear?
DeleteFeelings are like waves,
ReplyDeleteWe can’t stop them from coming
But they’re there anyways
Great simile-- and very accurate! Just like waves, we have to let them wash over us completely before they retreat. Be careful with syllables though, your last line has one too many. Maybe try taking out "but" or rewording it slightly?
DeleteFeelings are like waves,
DeleteWe can’t stop them from coming
they’re anyways there
There is a big tree
ReplyDeleteA bird nest is sitting there
In the warming sun
Nice job here, I especially like your last line "in the warming sun." I can almost feel it! Lyric poems, and haikus in particular, are very often reflections on nature. But they also often have an emotional connection to them rather than just mere observation. How does this make you feel? Just food for thought!
DeleteStress is a snowflake,
ReplyDeleteFrigidly unforgiving,
Followed by sorrow
Wonderful Krista! Your use of metaphor is powerful-- I love the description of the snowflake as "frigidly unforgiving." Great word choice.
DeleteRefreshing and cool,
ReplyDeletelove is a sweet summer rain
that washes the world
Beautiful!! You implemented metaphor excellently and portrayed a very beautiful, and emotionally powerful, depiction of love.
DeleteGlistening so bright
ReplyDeleteFluttering down from the sky
Oh how I love snow
Lovely job, Julia! Your word choice with "fluttering" paints a very gentle and peaceful image-- Well done.
DeleteI see cool colors
ReplyDeleteOrange, yellow, brown, and red
Fall is upon us
All the colors are the best part of fall! Nature has a way of making everything, including death, look stunning. Nice job here!
DeleteFall is in the air
ReplyDeleteleaves around everywhere
just feel the crisp breeze
Love your word choice of "crisp" to describe the breeze! Be careful though, "everywhere" is only 3 syllables not 4, so you're one short on that line. Can you think of another one syllable word to add to that line to balance it out?
DeletePlush and green,
ReplyDeleteBall at my feet,
Can I be any happier than this
You've got the reflective/emotional part of lyric poetry down perfect! But remember, haikus follow the syllabic pattern of 5 syllables in the first line, 7 syllables in the second, and 5 again in the last-- You've got 3-4-10. Try rewording it to get the pattern down correctly.
DeleteSoccer ball by feet,
DeleteMagnificent green around me,
Not ever any happier
The wind blows slowly,
ReplyDeleteThe leaves fall around my feet,
November is here
November is one of my favorite months! I like your description of the wind-- Nice job!
DeleteHarambe was bae.
ReplyDeleteWish he was still here today.
Dank memes for the win.
You've got the syllable count down perfectly, but remember lyric poetry is supposed to be reflective and emotional. Think nature or personal experience. None of us knew Harambe personally (as much as we might wish we had) and even the dankest of memes don't actually impact us on a deep level.
DeleteIt is Autumn time
ReplyDeleteLeaves crumple beneath my feet
Goodbye to summer
Nice word choice with "crumple"-- I like that description a lot! Good job, Mara.
DeleteThat's an aspen tree
ReplyDeleteBecause that's the way it is
Well how neat is that?
You have the syllable count down perfectly and your poem does include a natural aspect, but remember lyric poems should be reflective and/or emotional. Why did you choose an aspen tree? How does seeing that make you feel? Do you think it's pretty?
DeleteHiking through the woods,
ReplyDeleteBlisters and chafing on me,
Finally reach peak
Great job here, Ian-- Your poem actually builds up somewhat, with the hard work of hiking (and the subsequent blisters & chafing) finally being rewarded at the peak.
DeleteSkating on and on,
ReplyDeleteStick has the puck on the blade,
Buzzer rings, game won.
Hockey has always been one of the most enjoyable sports to watch for me-- Especially because who doesn't like a good fight? Nice job.
DeleteTyler Finley
ReplyDeleteI hurt the QB
He is crying to much now
We have won the game
Your syllable count is perfect and your poem is a personal reflection, but be careful with spelling. You're looking for "too" as a description of amount. Think about how you could connect this even further-- How did winning the game make you feel? What is it about this game in particular that stands out to you? Just food for thought!
DeleteRiding on a horse,
ReplyDeleteWalking around the arena,
Starting to canter.
Your poem follows the pattern perfectly and is personal to you-- Nice work. Some food for thought: How can you deepen the meaning even further, though? What about equestrian do you love?
DeleteWalking through the woods,
ReplyDeleteKnowing I would not make it,
But there's the light
Sounds kind of spooky-- Is this based on an actual event? Make it where? Be careful with your syllable count in the last line-- Using the contraction "there's" puts it at only 4 syllables. Try undoing the contraction to hit 5. Overall, good job Derick.
DeleteThe river flows soft
ReplyDeleteThe fish fly in the water
Along with the waves
Nice job, Cam! I like how your word choice of "flows" adds to the softness that you immediately reinforce.
Deleteflowers near flowers far
ReplyDeletesmells of spring near and far
spring has just began
Good job using nature in your poem, but be careful with your syllable count. A haiku should follow the 5-7-5 pattern-- Your first and second line both have 6.
DeleteIn the woods they roam
ReplyDeletethe wildlife is creeping
They are living life
I like your use of "roam" and "creeping"-- Makes the woods feel alive! Be careful with syllables though, "wildlife" is only two syllables so your second line is one short.
DeleteBeautiful sky full
ReplyDeleteClouds making wondrous shapes
Time to relax alone
Beautiful imagery here, Ana. You did a nice job reflecting on nature. Be careful with syllables-- "wondrous" is only two so your second line is short. Your last line has six so it has one too many.
DeleteHi there I like Pie
ReplyDeletePie is a food and a number
I talked about pie in this
Lyric poetry should be reflective and/or emotional-- Think nature or personal experience. Pie, or any other food, doesn't quite fit the bill unless you can connect it somehow to how it has impacted your life in some way. Also, haikus follow a 5-7-5 syllable pattern. Your second line has 8 and your last line has 7.
DeleteThe dark sky is grey
ReplyDeleteMake my bad dreams go away
The rain is falling
Nice job, Nate! Definitely has an eerie vibe to it.
DeleteBasketball is great
ReplyDeleteI play community ed
Basketball is fun
Your syllable count is perfect, Elbriko. But how can you connect this more emotionally? Why do you love basketball? How do you feel when you're playing?
DeleteWind blows on my skin
ReplyDeleteChilling my spine as I walk
Winter is coming
"Chilling my spine"-- nice description, Kendall! Great job.
DeleteGold leaves and cool breezes,
ReplyDeleteDark skies and wilting gardens,
Autumn has arrived
You simultaneously described the beauty of fall and the fact that it is nature's death in three lines-- Great job! Be careful though, your first line has 6 syllables. Maybe make "breezes" singular?
DeleteNature is pretty,
ReplyDeleteNature is green,blue,and brown,
Nature can be good.
Your syllable count is perfect and you included nature, which is great! How can you connect this to you personally, though? Give it some emotional context, rather than just description.
DeleteLife is good and bad
ReplyDeleteLife is a rollar coaster
It has ups and downs
Nice use of metaphor in the second line! Be more specific though, how has life been a roller coaster for you personally? Add some emotion to it.
DeleteFall is pretty cool,
ReplyDeleteIt brings happiness and joy,
it makes me happy.
Your poem fits the pattern and includes nature, but make it more specific-- Either to people as a whole or to you personally. How does fall bring happiness and joy? What about it? The trees? The colors? The activities? The food?
DeleteThe birds sing their songs,
ReplyDeleteFlowers bloom and leaves grow green,
Summer has arrived
Beautiful imagery! I especially like "leaves grow green" in the second line. Nice job.
DeleteEarth, water, fire, air.
ReplyDeleteThese are the four elements.
They make up the Earth.
I like your first line a lot, a really cool poem could build off that. Think about lyric poetry's purpose though: to express the thoughts or feelings of a speaker. What about the elements do you like? Why did you choose that of all topics? Rather than just stating facts, connect it to you personally on some level.
DeleteThe birds are chirping,
ReplyDeleteThey always fly in the sky,
Birds are beautiful.
Nice job with the syllable pattern and use of nature, but I think you can go further here. Connect this more specifically, either to you or to people. What about birds makes them beautiful? Why do you like them?
DeleteThe birds are chirping,
Deletewhat wonder they bring to us,
Soaring through the sky.
Sun peaks out from East,
ReplyDeletewind blows mysteriously,
the woods are perfect
I love your use of personification in the first line, but be careful with spelling. If you're referring to the verb, it should be "peeks." The description of the wind blowing "mysteriously" is nice too, good job.
DeleteLyrics are flowing,
ReplyDeleteThe beat is very soothing,
Music is my life
Nice job! I like the description of the lyrics as "flowing" a lot!
DeleteBeautiful music
ReplyDeleteThe different types
everywhere music
How does the music make you feel? Or how does it make people in general feel? What about the different types? Be careful with your syllable count, it should be 5-7-5 but your second line is two syllables short.
DeleteBeat racing through me
DeletePulsing through my heart and veins
The flow of language
The dark sky are gray
ReplyDeleteSummer is fading away
Goodbye good old days
Trees dropping leaves down,
ReplyDeleteFalling all around us all,
Fall is upon us.
Nice job here, but think about word choice. Is there another way you could word the second line to avoid repeating "all" twice? Just a thought!
DeleteDinosaurs Roar Loud
ReplyDeleteRunning across open fields
Crash they're all dead
RIP dinos. Remember lyric poetry should be personal, its purpose is to express the thoughts and feelings of the speaker. It's often used to reflect on personal experience. I'm no math guru, but I'm pretty sure you weren't around when the dinosaurs were. Be careful with syllable count too, your last line only has four. You could undo the contraction of "they're" to make it 5.
DeletePhotosynthesis
ReplyDeleteFlowers grow beautiful
Due to this process
I love how you used all five syllables in one word! Be careful though, your second line only has 6 syllables. Can you think of a way to add more emotion or your thoughts to this? Just an idea!
Deletesummer is over
ReplyDeleteschools back and we are back to
school again again
Remember, lyric poems are supposed to be reflective and thoughtful or emotional. How does being back to school make you feel? Your second and third lines repeat the same idea twice and using the word "again" twice to reach five syllables doesn't work-- We would sound silly if we spoke like that! What more can you add to this?
DeleteThe river's rushing
ReplyDeleteWater is white over rocks
Waterfall at end
Nice use of imagery and descriptive language here-- sounds like a beautiful place!
DeleteA new friend was near
ReplyDeleteSitting on the back porch here
Kitten's eyes appear
Love it! You did a great job, Mya!
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ReplyDeleteYou didn't write this.
DeleteFlowers are blooming
ReplyDeleteRainbow colors paint the ground
Red,Yellow,and Blue
My biggest fear is
ReplyDeleteThat he will never come back
That he's gone for good
Chilling! I love it, great job Steven.
DeleteClimb up the mountain
ReplyDeleteBoulders tumbling at me
Finally Reach Peak
The waves crash the shore
ReplyDeleteSeagulls flying everywhere
People everywhere
Cats, running, meowing
ReplyDeleteChasing Mice, eating much grass
Playing, played, sleep
The trees will age and die
ReplyDeleteVery Similar to I
Watch our time go by.
In the dark nights sky,
ReplyDeleteUnder the unknown darkness,
Is something not known,
The man in the moon
ReplyDeleteHe looks down on us and frowns
A sickening place
Home is not a place
ReplyDeleteIt is the people near you
My home, far away